What do you think of my personal statement draft?

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At school I enjoyed studying Art, English and Psychology. In particular, I enjoyed art as it has allowed me to be creative and explore new ideas. I think a degree in elementary education and art specialists allows me to share my passion for being creative. My primary interest in education began when I took part in two weeks of work experience, I worked with the age group 5-11. During the work experience that paired reading with the children and helped them in an art class making clay figures. After doing work experience knew I enjoyed being in the company of children, I think working with this age group would be rewarding. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus While studying psychology at the school they have enjoyed the development aspects of the subject. A particular case study I found interesting was "Transmission of aggression through imitation of aggressive models' Bandura study investigated the effects of adult aggression in children's behavior. I like the idea of ​​being responsible learning of children and would love to see them enjoying what they are taught. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Another of my interests is English literature and reading, I particularly enjoyed studying the war poems of Wilfred Owen as part of the AS course. The poems were powerful and Owen was really able to bring the graphic nature of the war to life. I also had the oppurtunity to go see Twelfth Night. MedlinePlus In pursuit of my interest in English I have also participated in the reading program associate at the school allowed me to support students in the school below. At school I've also been on a field trip to the Tate Modern, the exhibition of Francis Bacon encouraged my abstract style. I'm interested in artists such as Peter Lanyon appear in my theme A2 'abstract color in the landscape "under the influence of these artists that I could develop my own style, I am able to meet deadlines and work well course independently I feel I have gained the confidence to express my ideas. Having achieved a degree in art and entertainment level MedlinePlus hardworking person.I am my artistic nature is therefore useful as I would be able to create a positive environment motivator in the classroom. MedlinePlus Outside of school I have been involved in. .... MedlinePlus MedlinePlus (I've also just started writing tonight and have plenty of time to change it! Still have not said what I like to do outside of school and I'm planning to do volunteer work and work experience as well. Just want to know how i could improve?? advice of a real teacher preferable. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I want to study elementary education with technical specialty.
Answer1kennieAnswered at 2012-10-27 18:00:48
I obviously have a lot you want to say - which is great, better than nothing - but have not yet thought about what bits are really important and which bits are just there because they want to throw everything about you in income tutor. Remember, you're not trying to tell them everything about yourself, just selling yourself as an ideal candidate and someone who should be selected over the other five, ten, fifteen competitors for the place on the course - in this case, Why you ** would be the best elementary education with specialty art students. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Overall, I'd say you have a great start, but it is necessary to organize more and more to suit your course. To do this, you need to start taking notes. Think about the following questions and answer them honestly and positively: MedlinePlus - Why do you want to study elementary education with specialty art MedlinePlus - What are you studying topics that relate to primary education specializing MedlinePlus art? - What extra-curricular activities related to primary education with specialty art MedlinePlus - What other hobbies and interests do you have? Are they related to primary education with specialty art? MedlinePlus - Why do you want to go to college and why it would be good for you MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Then type the notes into paragraphs, after the section plan. Make sure the opening paragraph (why you want to study elementary education with technical expertise) is agile and attention, and make sure your last paragraph (why you want to go to college and benefits) all together for up as well. Keep clear sections, make sure you have good grammar and spelling at all, and all is well. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Also, check out the website and read their advice UCAS personal statement: http: / / www.ucas.com / students / startapplic ... MedlinePlus Good luck with both your personal statement and studies. :-)
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