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----Changes in Body Weight: Freshman 15

Today, many freshman students don’t know how to handle their eating habit and physical activity in a right way due to the new environment. Why have people always said freshman 15. Is this just a myth or truth? Some research shows that freshman students are lacking of physical exercised and eating three meals at a buffet-style dinning hall caused them weight change. Did students concern about their health from gaining weight? Gaining weight might appear minor for body in a short term, but it can cause serious health problems in a long term. In order to avoid those problems students must eat balance and do amounts of exercise to stay with a healthy lifestyle through all four years of college. The two study reports “The “freshman 5” A Meta- Analysis of Weight Gain in the Freshman Year of College” authors Rachel Vella-Zarb and Frank J. Elgar and the “Change in Body Weight and Fat Mass of Men and Woman in the First Year of College-Study of the “Freshman 15” authors Daniel J. Hoffman, Peggy Policastro, Virginia Quick, and Soo-Kyung Lee , argues that it is important to identify the exact causes behind weight gain changes and know how to devise appropriate prevention strategies to the students. Although both articles have collect good data about what are the factor effect student being overweight, Vella-Zarb did a better job by giving stronger details from a wide-ranging of year study with 3401 students, establishing Hoffman’s articles are weaker with only 67 students in the study.
One of the weight gain problem issue “The “freshman 5” A Meta- Analysis of Weight Gain in the Freshman Year of College,” Rachel A. Vella-Zarb , MA of psychology department, and Frank J. Elgar, PhD of psychology department at Carleton University. Vella-Zarb and Elgar cite their research from twenty-four studies that published in the year between January 1985 and April 2008 to support the conflict of freshman weight gain and the prevention strategies (Vella-Zarb &Elgar 163). The article examined several factors that associated with weight gain: low physical activity levels throughout the year, high junk food consumption, recent dieting, evening snacking, and a combination of dietary restraint and living in residences (Vella-Zarb &Elgar 164).Through the investigation, Vella-Zard and Elgar concluded that greater understanding of freshman weight gain could lead to prevention of this weight gain and thus a decreases in overweight and obesity among young adults (Vella-Zard &Elgar166).In particular, Valla-Zard and Elgar comments, “college health care providers should design weight gain prevention programs for first year students” meaning that programs should require for students to attend and give skills to prevent from weight gain, such as stress and lifestyle habits that can cause the factors of gaining weight instead of telling them started to eat less (Vella-Zard &Elgar 165).College should give a right message for students to balance their intake and exercised, buffet-style is all you can eat, but also mean need to moderate balance energy intake and expenditure in body weight, otherwise many student will end up with gaining weight unless they get greater understanding how to stay with a healthy life.
The other article entitled Change in Body Weight and Fat Mass of Men and Woman in the First Year of College-Study of the “Freshman 15”detail by Daniel J. Hoffman, Peggy Policastro, Virginia Quick, and Soo-Kyung Lee, faculties in the Department of Nutritional Sciences at Rutgers, the State University of New Jersey in New Brunswick. They examine weight change from focus on a sample of freshman, who attending the State University of New Jersey. The method they used to determine the weight change is not powerful enough and it is harder to believe those facts only from 64 students .Therefore, the result of the study finding that students didn’t pay much attention in their intake and outtake during a new environment, which cause them weight keep increasing. Hoffman concluded that “students recognize that weight changes seemingly minor and perhaps even harmless changes in eating or exercise behavior may result in large changes in weight over an extended period of time” (Homan43). In particular, Hoffman states, “For those students who experience weight gain over the period we studied, if their energy balance is not controlled, they could placing at risk for obesity and chronic diseases later in life” (Hoffman 45) which mean take controlled of what they eat is important for the solution.
Overall, both journal articles have credible issues about the reasons of weight gain, because the information proves that is coming from valid experiments, which make the reader more believable. Both studies also provides similar claim for their supporting reason to prevent weight gain among students entering college is great and it is impor
Answer1 Isaac Hayes Answered at 2017-03-31 10:00:42

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