Writing assignment for journal class. What do you think about style and content?

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MedlinePlus Rejection Expert MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I think twenty years of rejections under my belt qualifies me as an expert in failed relationships. No I have a doctorate in psychology, but I'm sure I have more experience in this department than any psychiatrist. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I will attest to the fact that the appeal has little to do with the attraction. The attitude is more important. An air of law goes a long way while a beautiful woman who is sweet, is a walking advertisement for every man who has been rejected for abusing it. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Standing on a busy street corner in New York, one night, had to be more than a score of other females standing around me in the light, and yet more heavy set man in a gray suit and pink shirt face saturated silk drunk on his own vomit zero caught me right in the crowd! MedlinePlus MedlinePlus "You think you're too good for me, right?" His eyes were bloodshot and pupils pin point appeared to anger big blue eyes and I froze with fear. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus "Run," I heard my best friend Kate instruct me to save me. His voice felt like I was given permission to miss, while the natural instincts wanted me to stay and defend. In fact, he tells me, momentarily, remaining there to tell a hostile drunk man twice my size I'm a good person. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus His hand grabbed my red satin skirt while resting in the crowd crossing the street. Kate quickly slapped his hand and he dropped me like a stranger pulled me out of reach. The light turned red again with him trapped on the other side accusing me of being a ***** stretched. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I felt bad for him at some level, but I was not to comfort him. I was young and felt misunderstood. What I take away from the experience combined with some other similar is that when my clashes with the chemistry of every man, there is nothing I can do to fix the situation and walking away is the only solution. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Professionally I have experienced similar behavior. A physicist obviously hated me before we even shared a patient. It was insulting and argumentative, but the icing on the cake was the day he came to where I was sitting and writing my notes. The unit was unusually quiet. The lights were low and it was stormy outside causing light gray strangely windows. He sat next to me and I felt like a mouse caught by a cat. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus "I want to have an intelligent conversation with you," he began. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I was shaking, but I still looked at the little imp was sordid. I said nothing. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus "Is there anything at all in that pretty little head of yours?" Then he asked me. "Do you know anything about anything? I have really wanted to hear him say something smart," continued to provoke me. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I was shaking and I felt ashamed when I looked up to see another physican standing there in front of me. The doctor said: "I can not believe you said that to her." MedlinePlus MedlinePlus His breath gave me a high gumph he had to say: "Yes, I do. Know you're a ... a hole!"
MedlinePlus He became humiliated and enraged, rising ran the automatic doors of the unit that caught and pressed his stethoscope to ... doink, doink, doink was heard, then snatch the floor again. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Technically both situations qualify as rejections because both were motivated by my being of the opposite sex. Some opinions may be different. The first was a man explaining that I was not his type because he felt he was a snob *****, contributing to him acting irrationally and the second was his desire to humiliate me for some unknown reason. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus My first real relationship ended because we lived too far and neither was able to move. This was followed by a ten-month relationship with a man who was only twenty years older than me, but I looked young for my age that made him look like my grandfather with his arms around me. I was mature enough to not care what others think until I learned of his pregnant wife who lived in another city where she worked. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I swore it would be wiser and never date a married man again. This is actually much easier said than done. If one were to do a survey in a mixed group, 90% of men were asked if they ever cheated on your partner respond "no way". This means that, unfortunately, I meet another 10% who just can not remember their commitment to the woman who lives with them. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus Being a typical woman, I fell on my side of Don Juan. Who could resist a lawyer who is the bathroom and the door waiting for him not to go? I accepted his invitation to walk and still enjoyed kissing this handsome stranger with strong male hands. Was his turn to use the men's room, but instead of walking back into the bar, he peed on my right front tire in front of me! My dreams of becoming his wife sprayed in a stream in the parking yellow tar. He insisted that I was his dream girl. I got into the car and left. MedlinePlus MedlinePlus I professed my love for men that are meant for me, and I found those who were obsessed. I cried when abandoned by men who told me I was ugly, but I never thought of accepting a second date and those who had the nerve to call me, I played with saying "you deserve someone who is already perfect! I refuse to let that settle with me. "
MedlinePlus I think men and women alike have to drive when the attraction comes into play. Of course, I'm not a dating expert, but if you ever need advice on rejection, I'm an expert!
Answer1MacailaAnswered at 2012-10-14 21:00:13
His style is open and friendly - a nice publishing " Andy Rooney" style dialogue with your readers . Its content is not bad either. You are some very good examples to prove his point . I see one or two minor errors in spelling and syntax . Everyman should be two words in PP2 . PP3 is a long sentence . We need to break things up . Otherwise, you need a quick edit and it's ready to go within Pax - C
Answer2AllysonAnswered at 2012-10-22 00:46:37
very good , as read directly from a novel
Answer3MeredithAnswered at 2012-10-24 07:43:14
not to be mean or anything, but it seams like there is a little history of this hypothesis and opinions that seem to be a fact. I would have ripped my guides new knowledge for this effort , but they are bad so do not go by me ....
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